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There are a couple of paragraphs that did not get sent

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They drew blood, lots of it, in hopes they would see a flag being sent up by his body.

Bill waited and waited. And waited.

Finally, the doctor returned to let him know all he needed was a vitamin.

Calcium, to be exact.

Bill realized that his dislike of milk products could have led to this.

Maybe the supplement would be a good thing.

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Now, we see that Bill could have had something terrible. He could have been very sick and not known it, but he ended up needing to drink more milk.

Determine what makes the character tick, and use it throughout the story. But, whatever you do, be consistent CHARACTER to CHARACTER

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